Hello fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)! :-) Halfway through January already! Putting this post together, I realized I have not posted from my WIP, Dai Klavven, since November 6th. Holy cow! I didn't mean for that to happen. Onward...
Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live before 9:00 AM Sunday EST. (We check signups and remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post-- to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA) Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE.
This week's snippet: We're back to our main character, Lily. After Earth's invasion, she was captured by the wasp-like alien (Bulrager) slavers. She caught the attention of one of their military leaders who has forced her to go with him to another place in the ship. She's just realized that she is at a fighting ring. Last week's snippet ended with this: "So this must be how they pass the long days between capturing slaves, and unloading them somewhere out in the hinterlands of space to sell to the highest bidder.”
We continue from there...
The guards held sticks that sizzled, sending blue-white sparks from their tips. Some sort of shock prod? The giants seemed to know what they were, and gave a wide berth to the Bulragers carrying them.
Just inside the door, two guards and four fighters stood behind a chest high wall. A lot of good that flimsy thing would do. Even she could see that it offered zero protection against those monsters. They gave the men clubs and then sent two of them against the huge naked fighter.
It was a massacre: The guards stopped the fight while the men still moved, and they dragged them out of the ring. They threatened flabby with their shock sticks until they had him backed up against the wall.
Next they sent the hairy giant in and turned the other two men loose with clubs.
That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.