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Welcome to the end of January and to another week of snips and bits of amazing writing by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA). Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
This
week's snippet:
After Earth's invasion, Lily was captured by the wasp-like alien
(Bulrager) slavers. She's been subjected to a sort of alien fight-club
they have, something to kill time while they journey through space to where they sell their slave cargo. Jobe is Lily's dog. Jean is one of three other humans she's found so far in her large holding cell. Jean, his girlfriend, Mirelle, and their friend, Maurice. They are from France, but hey, once you start cruising among the stars, France is like right next door to the USA, huh? :-)
Two
more times she sat beside the psychotic alien and watched slaves beat each other
half to death. Twice he tried his best to convince her to come of her free will
to his quarters, tempting her with everything imaginable--better food, better clothing,
a comfortable bed, next to him of course.
Each
time, she found a way around his questions. But it was easy to see that his
patience had worn about as thin as her chances of escape. Damn thin.When he came to get
her a third time, and to collect fighters, she tried as before to pass Jobe off
to Jean, but things went about as wrong as things could go.
That's it for this week. What works and what doesn't? I'm
grateful for every bit of feedback you share.
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Uh-oh, I sense some unwelcome leverage if he spots Jobe!
ReplyDeleteBTW, have you seen any emails from me this month? I sent you the draft of Ashes as you asked but I'm wondering if it vanished into a junk folder...
Involving the dog is a great way to engage readers' sympathies. I know you've got me hooked.
ReplyDeleteThis doesn't sound too good. Great snippet
ReplyDeleteOh, no!! Not the DOG! I can't wait (and hate) to see the next snippet.
ReplyDeleteWhat an odd (and scary) situations she's in. I'm wondering what the dog is doing through all of this. Is it quiet? Barking? Growling?
ReplyDeleteHow dare you leave it right there! LOL I'm just as curious as Cara about what Jobe has been doing. Looking forward to finding out next week. :)
ReplyDeleteTalk about a cliffhanger. No fair. What went wrong? I will return. :)
ReplyDeleteWow, that is a cliffhanger but of course I want to keep reading so well done! Great snippet...
ReplyDeleteIt sounds as though he's going to try some tougher tactics to persuade her. Hope the dog bites him.
ReplyDeleteExcellent cliff hanger, Teresa. Lilly is not going to get out of this one easily.
ReplyDeleteWhat a cliff hanger. I want tot know what went so terribly wrong. :)
ReplyDeleteI hope you'll continue next week!
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued! Sometimes it's hard to keep track of the authors with what stories but I'll be looking for yours, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteYIKES! Big trouble ahead for the feisty girl with her dog. Terrific, snippet, my friend.
ReplyDeleteHOW did they go wrong??!! Good lord, woman, don't keep us hanging! :-)
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet. A real cliff-hanger. I hope she gets away.
ReplyDeleteOh, Teresa, you're killin' me with the cliffhanger! lol. Great build-up in this scene. Can't wait for more!
ReplyDeleteWhat a tough place to be. Thanks for a great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Teresa, for leaving things up in the air like that. What a place to end. Is that the end of your chapter, too?
ReplyDeleteCan go as wrong as can be --- and then you end it there?!?!?!?
ReplyDeleteTweeted.
This time I will make sure that I keep reading. I am not very good with guessing.
ReplyDeleteI have to admit, it seems a little weird he's asking. He could probably force her, and he certainly doesn't seen to care about other species! Very glad he hasn't, though.
ReplyDeleteBet he's going to secure her cooperation by threatening the dog. What a scummy alien!
ReplyDeleteGoing as wrong as possible covers a lot of ground. And I don't like the sound of any of it! I trust Lily and Jobe will win through, but Jean...Great cliffhanger!
ReplyDeleteHaha but of course they did. I love Lily, but she really does have wretched luck. ;)
ReplyDeleteJobe will get through all this alive and in one piece. Right?
ReplyDeleteA lot of tension here. Great snippet.
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