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Saturday, February 16, 2019

Evil From The Sky: WeWriWa Feb 17, 2019


Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors


   It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
            This week's snippet is from my WIP, "The Sands of Dhor".  Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand--who seems to have rescued her from the slavers. His race can communicate mind to mind.  They have stopped on a world while en-route to his Dominion. They're visiting people he knows. She suspects he has some connection to them that he is keeping from her. They live in a cave system to escape detection of slavers. It's evening and their underground village has gathered for storytime. The Elder Spense has just told the children what the world used to be like. Creative punctuation ahead--to comply with guidelines. :-)

When the Elder finished, Lily sat in silence, basking in the spell he’d cast.

Without warning, a thunderous voice boomed, “Then evil came from the sky!”

As Lily straightened herself after nearly falling off her cushion, she glanced around and saw others doing the same. At least she wasn’t the only one startled half to death. 

Theusand’s words filtered into her mind. “That is Narge, still bitter over the land and home that he lost.”

When Narge continued, his voice was lower, but he gestured wildly with his hands, his facial expressions went from frightened to fierce.  “The Bulragers, a cruel and greedy race of slavers, came from the sky, from our beautiful blue sky. They captured a great number our people and hauled us away, out into the stars. Forcibly, the diaspora of our people had begun again. 

Ahhh, the Bulragers have reentered the story. That's it for this week.  All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for commenting!

34 comments:

  1. They have a very dramatic well of delivering their people's history.

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  2. They just can't stay away and keep their hands to themselves, can they? ;) Nice snippet.

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  3. Way to interrupt a Zen moment, Narge! And nice way to include backstory, Teresa!

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  4. Someone knows a dramatic moment when they see it. Always keep your audience on the edge of their seat by bringing in the villains. Excellent incorporation of the back story, teresa!

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  5. You've done it again, my friend. Always exciting and full of mischief.

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    1. Haha! Must have mischief! Thanks for visiting, my friend. :-)

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  6. Oh, sounds like the same thing that happened to Earth. I love how dramatically he continues the story!!

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  7. The question that's been on my mind for some time is - what is the relationship between the Bulragers and Theusand? They were on the same ship together from what I can remember of earlier snippets.

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    1. Hi, Ian. Theusand is a mind-walker. His task is to sense emotions of the crew on board the ship. That is to stop disputes before they turn violent. Sort of a forced peace.

      It's a monstrous size ship. Private ownership--non-military. They take contracts to haul cargo.

      The Bulragers contracted the shipping company to haul people for them. Slaves. Because the people were collected out of Dhor'en (The Sands') jurisdiction, it wasn't illegal. However, once they entered Dhor'en controlled space, any Itellektai they have locked up in the cargo holds must be freed. In the case of the MC, Lily, she is capable of sending her emotions--the most rudimentary form of mind-to-mind communcating. Theusand locates her and realizes that she is capable of being taught (and to advance) her soundless communication.

      Theusand despises slavery. But things are going south on his home world. And the door to slavery is about to be opened.

      Dev Areen will be coming back to the story later in the book.

      Thanks for visiting! :-)

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  8. Ah - it's a real dramatic play.
    But why does Lord Sand want her there? To see how hopeless life on Earth must be?

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    1. She is just starting to figure out that he is in some way, related to these people.

      Earlier in the story, there were the three Earthlings from France. Theusand told Lily--in front of witnesses that he coudn't help them because they wren't Itellektai. This stop has something to do with that--and to let the reader see how complex he is. He is a son of a gun, and they way we perceive his behavior (in our very human way) is that he can be as cold as they come. But, he can also do things that are good and kind. Here again, we're limited to very human self-projection when trying to discern his motivation for the things he does.

      Anyway, he is there for a reason, and he will not leave Lily on board the cargo ship with Dev Areen on board. So she had to come with him planet-side.

      Thanks for visiting!

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  9. Narge can sure pick his moment to bring up the unpleasant parts! Really a well done 'startle' moment for the characters and the reader. Enjoyed the excerpt..

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    1. Yeah. He's a bugger, lol. He has issues with Elder Spense and the way he herds the flock. :-)

      Thanks for visiting, Jean!

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  10. So she shares a common fate with these people. Is that why Theusand brought her there?

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    1. It's a bonus. (Terrible, I know, huh?) He's actuallt there for a specific reason and it has to do with the three French Earthlings from earlier in the story...the three that he told Lily he couldn't help because they weren't Itellektai. Here's a hint. ~whispering~ In another part of the story where he's having it out with Dev Areen (and discovers that the Bulragers' contract specifically gives them a pass to haul slaves) Dev Areen angrily demands to know what happened to three missing slaves from the day that Theusand took Lily away from the cargo holds. :-)

      Thanks for visiting!

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  11. What a startling moment! I'm curious to know why she needed to hear this story. It seems similar to what happened to Earth. So many questions. :)

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    1. And questions are good, right? lol Would you read more, that is the real question.

      Thanks for visiting, Karen!

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  12. I have a hunch it's not useless information.
    I forgot to add my link. If you have a chance, I have my snippet up too. Karen's Shenanigans

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    1. Your hunch is right. Not useless at all!

      I got you on the list. I apologize that I didn't get you on there earlier in the day.

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  13. I don't blame him for being bitter. From the sound of the story they all lost a wonderful world when evil came from the sky.

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    1. It was a rough thing, they went through. Thanks for visiting, Elaine!

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  14. Could've been a little less dramatic there, Narge. Your audience does not need to have a heart attack before the end of the tale.

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    1. Haha! Some lessons in story-telling, perhaps? ;-) Thanks, Aldrea. :-)

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  15. Good job showing his anger and frustration over what's happened to them as a people. His timing could've been better. LOL

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    1. It could have. Last thing the listeners want to is to go arse over tin cups. lol Thanks, Diane!

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  16. It certainly would be unsettling to have someone come along bellowing about evil from the sky! I like Narge. He's an interesting character.

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    1. Variety does make for an interesting gathering. :-) Thanks for visiting, Cara!

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