Hello
all my fellow Warriors (and Snippeteers)!. :-) Happy April! We're getting a shot of winter tonight. ~sigh~ It will go soon enough.
Weekend Writing
Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of
their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live between noon, Saturday,
and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment,
critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart
good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
Tentatively, it was a chapter end. I've skipped ahead a couple of paragraphs. Lily is on the ground with her wrists and ankles secured. For the animal lovers--Jobe is right next to her:
~Looking up at the stars, her tears
finally came. Tears for her children—she prayed they were safe. The government bus she’d
put them on nearly two weeks ago was headed to Alaska. The aliens had shown no interest in colder
regions, so her little girls were in a refugee camp far up north, along
with her sister, her nephews, niece , and her brother in law. She didn’t regret it though—staying behind to
try to find Damien. He’d have done the same.
News had come via the Emergency Broadcasting System that heavy Bulrager reinforcements arrived in New York City. No one knew what to think--until the aliens started to move in mass numbers. Still, she and Damien never dreamed they'd have only two days to get out before the invaders reached Pittsburgh's suburbs. How stupid they'd been, counting on the mountains and rough terrain between home and New York to slow down aliens who had traveled across a galaxy, maybe even across the universe.~
That's it for this week. Thank you for reading
it. I learn from your comments--and I'm so grateful for any insight you share. Have a great week!
Now I want to know who Damien is. And, of course, what's going to happen next. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteExcellent way to introduce back story, Teresa. I also look forward to finding out more about Damien.
ReplyDeleteAh, some useful backstory. From a strictly logical perspective, she and Damien (her husband, I assume) can be forgiven for not foreseeing the alien's intent; but it is tragic.
ReplyDeleteShe has children? And a husband? Oh dear... Where is Damien? I hope her kids are safe. And thanks for letting us know the dog was still there! <3 I love the last line where she realizes that it was silly to think that they could outrun creatures that had traveled a galaxy. Reality starts to set in... Great snippet, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteGlad her kids are safe! I'm wondering who Damien is. I love how this story is progressing. I look forward to it every week.
ReplyDeleteWow, Teresa - this snippet really opened your story world up for me. It's exciting to think about how Lily and Damien will overcome this harrowing invasion.
ReplyDeleteLoved the snippet...yes, we don't always think rationally when it comes to invading aliens. Enjoyed it!
ReplyDeleteStunning snippet, Reesie. I think her thoughts and reactions are quite reasonable, given the situation. Nicely done!
ReplyDeletePretty terrifying situation. In their defense, I probably would have assumed natural terrain would have helped, too, then kicked myself later when I thought about it...can't wait to read this in full!
ReplyDeleteLove how you're giving us some background now. I'm glad the rest of her family is safe- I probably would have counted on natural barriers helping as well!
ReplyDeleteI think her thoughts are very realistic and what a great point - that terrestial terrain isn't likely to defeat aliens! Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteNothing stops the aliens just like the terrorists. Wonderful snippet, Teresa. I'm loving this story.
ReplyDeletePoor Lily. A neat way gently to slip some backstory into the narrative - very nice.
ReplyDeleteLove the backstory along with what is currently happening. Wonderful writing! Also, thanks for taking care of us animal lovers ;-)
ReplyDeleteTHANK GOD THE DOG IS SAFE!!!!!!!!!! Oh, sorry, I got a bit excited, lol. A good time to regroup and do a little backstory drop, I agree with the others. But I fear she won't have long to ponder things before she's in the fray again! Awesome story. Can't wait til next week!
ReplyDeleteI think the terrain not stopping them is a great point! Love where this is going! Thank for sharing!-Book Bling
ReplyDeleteGreat to know some of the back story, and glad that the children are safe, as well as the dog. Sounds a very interesting story and look forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad her children got away.
ReplyDeleteI really liked that last line. That's exactly the way people would behave. They'd think they had time to spare when of course they didn't.
ReplyDeleteThose last lines bring home how dire the situation is with the Aliens. Truly, what are a few trees and mountains when they traveled galaxies. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteFirst, thank you for sharing Jobe's fate;).
ReplyDeleteSecond, I love the snippet. Beautiful writing that shows so much. Now I know what happened and get an idea how she ended up where she did.
I wasn't sure if the kids were her biological kids or if they were kids she looked after. If your vagueness is on purpose just ignore me, if not, maybe clarify a little bit.
Sad and spooky, but that keeps people reading. People often can't cope with reality when it falls that far outside the norm, so her & Damien's reaction is believable. But of course now we're all pulling for the family, and the dog, and we're all on the edge of our seats!
ReplyDeleteIt could have been possible for the terrain to slow them--depends on what they prepared for. Obviously it did not, though.
ReplyDeleteGood to know a bit more about the background of the invasion and it wasn't totally unrealistic to think rough terrain would slow down the aliens. They just lost that wager. Still hoping Lily can get away.
ReplyDeleteYou can really hear her despair. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHey, I'm really loving this story. It's very intriguing. I can almost hear that broadcast go out. :)
ReplyDeleteSo who is Damien and what happened to him? This snippet raises all sorts of interesting questions, as well as answering a few. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteSometimes being given the time to allow your thoughts to haunt you is painful. Great way to being us into her story (please, please save the doggie...)
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