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This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans and a weakness. The last sentence posted from this scene was: Her mouth continued to move but no words would come.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans and a weakness. The last sentence posted from this scene was: Her mouth continued to move but no words would come.
Continuing from there...
Theusand filled the new silence. “Children
are the exception. As a design of an advanced organism, young humans accept change as a survival tool likely because their existence at
that stage is constant change. If they stressed over each change, they might
not survive to adulthood.”
“You are full of…” Her words ceased—nothing
would come; the bastard had cut her off again.
“I have assimilated the knowledge in
your education books.”
Her voice returned, and what he'd assimilated was the least of her thoughts. “How can we have an honest conversation when you
repeatedly slap me with a mental gag order?”
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It's
good to be back. Last week's respite was a trip to the Twilight Zone of
no phone, no internet (thank you, Consolidated Communications) and also
a journey into the strange world the splicer created when he not only left the
job incomplete, but somehow managed to splice our feed wire to the
phone line of our neighbor--who was not happy when he came to tell us that
our calls were going to his house. ~sigh~ Honestly, we did not request
the reroute so he could act as our social secretary.
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Missed you, Mrs. Happy you've returned to regale us with another snip of your fascinating tale. So scary, by the way.
ReplyDeleteVery intriguing! Though we all know books only tell part of the story, especially history books.
ReplyDeleteA mental gag order?! That would be annoying!
ReplyDeleteThere's more than what's in books, though. And I love that last line.
ReplyDeleteShe is absolutely correct - he's treating her like a child.
ReplyDeleteI'd say it's because he doesn't want a conversation--he wants her to listen and do what she's told. Not much chance of that, though!
ReplyDeleteHow infuriating! Can she punch him? I want her to punch him.
ReplyDeleteYikes! Bad enough to have a man cutting you off with his own words. Worse to have him render you mute! I don't like this at all.
ReplyDeleteI think that I am in the "Can she punch him?" camp. I hope she's able to get her own back. Sorry about the phone/internet problems.
ReplyDeleteHis attitude is so infuriating, which means it's all very well written by you :) Another fascinating snippet today, hard to see how she'll ever win an argument with this guy.
ReplyDeleteI wish I had the power to turn off voices I don't want to hear...
ReplyDeleteI love the idea of a mental gag order. It sure would make talking with him annoying. It's bad enough when some ignores you, but this is worse. I hope she can convince to cool it.
ReplyDeleteMental gag order? Say it isn't so. I'd punch him, too.
ReplyDeleteHe's so full of himself isn't he! Great excerpt and you've done a really good job of making him v annoying! :)
ReplyDeleteI'm afraid I'm in the pointless violence camp. You've done a great job of stirring reader emotions!
ReplyDeleteLily is awesome. :D
ReplyDeleteHis attitude is infuriating!!
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