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This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans. The last sentence posted last week was spoken by Lily: “How can we have an honest conversation when you repeatedly slap me with a mental gag order?”
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This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand--he's a different kind of alien. They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. They are having a discussion and the topic has turned to humans. The last sentence posted last week was spoken by Lily: “How can we have an honest conversation when you repeatedly slap me with a mental gag order?”
Continuing from there...
“A mental gag order… Oh, I see.” His
smirk came through unhampered. “We would never finish a conversation if I
allowed your irrationality to proceed.”
“You know, at home, on Earth, I’m not
known as an irrational person. In fact, people respect my logic, my
intelligence, and my ability to be calm in the face of the worst storm. Could
it be that you are the cause of my newfound irrationality’?”
He did something she’d never witnessed him do, something so human it softened her heart.
He laughed out loud. Then he said, “There are worse things I could cause you to do.”
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I love this story and what you brought to us this day makes it even better.
ReplyDeleteThat laugh and his words make him that much scarier, I think.
ReplyDeleteGreat scene. Unexpected and enjoyable, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteI love her intelligent criticism and apparently so does he. Maybe he is reassessing his opinion of humans.
ReplyDeleteI'm so intrigued by him! He laughs and then he, kinda, threatens her. I can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteI will never tire of her sass. :D
ReplyDeleteAn interesting relationship between the two of them. I definitely want to read more.
ReplyDeleteGlad to see she's finally making some inroads on an actual discussion with this guy. Enjoyed the snippet!
ReplyDeleteI think he took her comment as a compliment.
ReplyDeleteThat laugh would soften my heart too. At my blog you asked if we were in the path of the eclipse, and we are. We are not far from Greenville.
ReplyDeleteI can see why he thinks this is funny. Nice scene -- and it does humanize him.
ReplyDeleteOoh, I think I'm warming to him - it was the laugh that did it!
ReplyDeleteI love your dialogue in this scene, Teresa! It reveals a lot about both characters. Very nicely written!
ReplyDeleteYeah, it's not a real conversation if one person keeps making the other shut up. :P
ReplyDeleteShe needs to teach him a few lessons on fair play.
ReplyDeleteIt's a very interesting situation and I think the chemistry works well between the characters.
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