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Saturday, September 2, 2017

Weekend Writing Warriors Sept. 3, 2017

     Happy September, all!

            It's time for
snips and bits of amazing tales by talented writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday, EST. (We check signups to remove links when we don't find a wewriwa post--to save our participants from clicking on empty links--so please have it live by 9:00 Sunday morning--eastern USA. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 

             Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor".
I've skipped ahead a couple of paras. Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is following Theusand. He's not a slaver.  He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind. 
            They've left the section of the ship where he and his Chays (monks) are quartered. It's the first time she's left that deck since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship.  Their conversation is stuck on Earth's college level health class. The first sentence this week is spoken by Theusand:  

“Of course I do not, but perhaps you needed to hear yourself say it. When your angry words fly, your mind loses any sense of logic it may have had.  Let me begin again. I have studied your Health 101 memories.”
“For Christ’s sake, you’ve driven that point home quite well. I know you know all about our freshman health class.”
He nodded at her. His words were full of that oh-so-infuriating calm when he said, “I do, indeed.  Do you recall learning about stasis?”
What works and what doesn't? I'm grateful for every bit of feedback you share.


  1. This is one weird topic between alien and abducted human. Yet it works.

  2. It's so true that logic often flies out the window when we speak in anger.

  3. Oh, I wonder where that last statement is going to lead. Great snippet! :)

  4. It's so infuriating when you are full of irritation, and the other person is simply calm. I wonder where this is going.

  5. Too smart is he. And she wants to get him out of the way. What a situation!

  6. I would certainly want to hit or at least shake him, see if that makes him lose his calm and logic. :p Great snippet. Intrigued to see where it goes.

  7. Sort of amusing that he's reaching for her Health 101 lessons. Nice, unusual touch. Enjoyed the excerpt - her frustration comes through loud and clear and naturally.

  8. Oh, man, I would hate the idea of anyone plundering my memories from college! I think I'd rather go back to the fight ring.

  9. It is so frustrating when you're upset about something and the other person is calm. You've pictured that well. Stasis? Hmmm.

  10. Health 101 . . . hygiene or reproductive health, I wonder!

  11. Great tension with the contraast with him being so cool and her getting more and more exasperated - and who could blame her?

  12. He has a point about feelings and logic, and yet... I think you lose something when you flatten your emotions too much. Anger can be productive is it fuels much needed change, for example.