It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented
writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week,
participants sign up HERE
at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or
unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday,
EST. Then we visit each
other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a
solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
The slaver, Dev Areen is demanding that Lily (he claims as his property) be returned to him. So now we have a 'test' to prove that Lily can communicate via mind to mind, therefore cannot be enslaved.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver--and he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
The slaver, Dev Areen is demanding that Lily (he claims as his property) be returned to him. So now we have a 'test' to prove that Lily can communicate via mind to mind, therefore cannot be enslaved.
Last week's snippet ended with: “He beat me, he threatened sexual assault. He lifted me off of the ground by my hair. He…”
We continue from there:
"Her painful thoughts halted. Everyone
and everything fell away from the moment, just her and Lord Sand remained in her
mind. Soothing warmth flowed through her, stilling her trembling.
Theusand said, “Enough, Lily. A poor
choice on my part. It was not about what he did to you; it was about demonstrating
you can communicate without saying the words out loud.”
Then her head was crowded again. The Sand’s
tone shifted to stern when he continued. “Captain, I am sure this demonstration
met all requirements of legal proof.”
That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and
for commenting!
I definitely hope that was enough. Poor Lily.
ReplyDeleteIt was for the captain, but it will never be enough for Dev Areen.
DeleteThere appears to be a touch of sarcasm in his voice, just enough to hurt her. Fight back, I say. Always good reading, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteI hope you received my whine about Linky again. HELP!
Thanks, Charmaine! I did get your message, but not until earlier this morning. Got is fixed right away then. Hugs...
DeletePoor Lily to have to relive all that. I'm curious to know what happens next. :)
ReplyDeleteHer whole world is about to come crashing down around her, and that has nothing to do with the slaver.
DeleteI hope the captain agrees with Theusand but why do I have the feeling things won't go that easily? Really enjoyed the snippet...
ReplyDeleteThe story is always so much better when things don't go easily. ;-)
DeleteOh, the cunning old goat! His actions make more sense now. Well done.
ReplyDelete:-) Your comment made me laugh, Ian. Cunning old goat... Too funny!
DeleteI'm sure Lily's demonstration met the requirements, but does the captain agree? I bet we're all wondering what his response will be. Neat snippet!
ReplyDeleteHe does. He is afraid of Dev Areen, but even more afraid of Theusand. I think the next snippet or two will tell why.
DeleteTelling glimpse into a world where the slavery and abuse don't matter, only the fact that she can communicate telepathically.
ReplyDeleteIt is telling. Dev Areen's makes his living off of capturing slaves, and then selling them. It is not permitted in Theusand's culture. But things change--and too often, not for the better.
DeleteHe must be correct about legal proof, but will it be sufficient for the slaver?
ReplyDeleteEarlier in the story, the bulrager slaver Dev Areen tells Lily that when a bulrager is wronged, they always get revenge.
DeleteOh, that's clever indeed. Very nicely written, Teresa! You've weaved together quite a story here. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Julie! :-)
DeleteI wonder if his choice was truly a poor one. Possibly her powerful emotions helped her make her case more forcefully.
ReplyDeleteYep. Far more than words travel mind to mind. :-)
DeleteShe may have the requirements to the letter of the law, but this slaver may yet have a trick of some sort up his sleeve. I don't trust him! I hope Theusand can counter anything he may come up with. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteHe has tricks, for sure. Theusand is tough, but he is developing a chink in his armor and its name is Lily...
DeleteI don't trust Dev Avreen either. Thesesnippets are so intriguing -I want to read the book when it's out!
ReplyDeleteYou are smart not to trust Dev. :-) Thanks, Hywela!
DeleteI'm sure Lily's demonstration met the requirements, but why do I have the feeling it won't be that easy.
ReplyDeleteIf it were just that easy... :-)
DeleteChallenges make for such a good story though.
Poor Lily indeed. I wonder what will happen next?
ReplyDeleteShe is in a bad place. I think that lack of control of her situation would drive me crazy.
DeleteThat poor woman! Have so many people in her head. Good snippet. Makes me want to know more.
ReplyDeleteShe's a tough one. That's a good thing.
DeleteI hope someone shows her kindness soon!
ReplyDeleteHe will try. But her world is about to crash down around her.
DeletePoor Lily. She still is in a hard place. I thought the snippet was very well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks Elaine. Oh, how we torture our characters. :-)
DeleteThis must be incredibly hard to deal with. Great portrayal of her feelings!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Christina! :-)
DeleteHe wasn't winning any points with me, but the way he reassures her got him one point. ;)
ReplyDeleteHaha! You're a tough one, Caitlin! lol
DeleteGreat snippet and the story sounds so intriguing!
ReplyDeleteOh my. Just with those few sentences you've build a cool story world, or a snatch of one. Love it!
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