Happy beginning of the summer season--here in the USA. Also, this Monday is a day of remembrance for our military service members who gave all in service to their country.
FYI, from:Memorandum for the Heads of Exec Depts and Agencies Subject: White House Program for the National Moment of Remembrance
3 May 2000
"Accordingly, I hereby direct all executive departments and agencies, in
consultation with the White House Program for the National Moment of
Remembrance (Program), to promote a “National Moment of Remembrance” to
occur at 3 p.m. (local time) on each Memorial Day."To
remember and reflect on the sacrifices made by so many to provide
freedom for all."
Onward...
It's time for snips and bits of amazing tales by talented
writers! Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop. Each week,
participants sign up HERE
at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or
unpublished, on their own blog to go live by before 9:00 AM Sunday,
EST. Then we visit each
other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a
solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver-- he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
The slaver, Dev Areen is demanding that Lily (he claims as his property) be returned to him. Theusand just proved that Lily can communicate via mind to mind, therefore cannot be enslaved.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE
This week's snippet is from "The Sands of Dhor". Lily, abducted from Earth by alien slavers, is with Theusand. He's not a slaver-- he saved Lily, sort of. He's Dhor'en; they communicate mind to mind.
The slaver, Dev Areen is demanding that Lily (he claims as his property) be returned to him. Theusand just proved that Lily can communicate via mind to mind, therefore cannot be enslaved.
Last week's snippet ended with: “Captain, I am sure this demonstration met all requirements of legal proof.”
Please forgive creative punctuation used to stay within wewriwa guidelines. We continue from there:
As he turned toward Dev Areen, the man’s eyes looked huge in his small head, like a frightened mouse. Stammering at first, he finally squeaked out, “I have
confirmed she is as the Sand says, I-tellekti.”
Turning his killer eyes on Dev
Areen next, Theusand said, “Do not try me. If you lay a hand on this female again, your heart will stop
beating. Do you understand?”.
Lily recoiled at the sensation accompanying his words, his voice like a sharp steel blade cutting through her mind. If they were as painful to the slaver, she couldn't tell.
Dev Areen puffed out his chest, made a show of yacking-up something in his throat, then spit on the floor at Theusand's feet. His evil grin returned, but this time it looked forced. He spun on his
heel and then strutted away.
I don't think it's over with that disgusting creature. That's it. All opinions greatly appreciated. :-) Thank you so much for visiting and for commenting!
I get the impression Theusand has won the battle, but the war is still up for grabs. I do hope you've got a draft finished (or nearly there) because I would love to read this in its entirety one day.
ReplyDeleteWell, she won't be sent back to become a slave, but is Theusand willing to help her, or will he keep her as his own captive? I am looking forward to reading this story in its entirety. :)
ReplyDeleteI'm with Jessica. Spill the whole story, dear leader or we'll come after you!
ReplyDeleteThat scene is both creepy and intense! I don't think the trouble is over as easily as that.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I don't think that creep will leave it at that. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteThis doesn't bode well. The slaver is going to want revenge at some point. Can't wait to read more!
ReplyDeleteLove the phlegm imagery. theglobaldig.blogspot.com
ReplyDeleteHe is disgusting isn't he. I'm really keen to knw how this is going to pan out - great snippet, Teressa!
ReplyDeleteWell that was kinda intense!
ReplyDeleteYuck! But an interesting snippet nonetheless. Well done!
ReplyDeleteHmm, so Dev Areen's not defeated so easily, it appears. I wonder what he thinks he has as an ace in the hole (or its alien equivalent)? Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene. I loved the physical sensation of Theusand's anger. And like the others, I fear that Dev Areen is already plotting his revenge.
ReplyDeleteYacked up . . . love that visual! What an arrogant coward. Great villain material.
ReplyDeleteYay! He got rid of him for now. Theusand is also a pretty scary guy, though at least he doesn’t seem to mean Lily harm.
ReplyDeleteYacked up.. .I can hear it and feel it in my throat. If I didn't think he was gross before I sure do now. I doubt we saw the last of him, great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank God he's leaving. Unfortunately, I believe he'll be back. I could hear the screech of the steel knives in his voice! Excellent description!
ReplyDeleteThe slaver has way too much power he's enjoyed abusing. No way he's going quietly.
ReplyDeleteIt's clear that this guy doesn't consider this interaction over yet!
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking Theusand better watch his back.
ReplyDeleteDitto what the others said. Great snippet. Very tense. But not over.
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