Weekend Writing Warriors is where we share snips and bits of amazing tales by talented authors and writers. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished (we like it all) on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM each Sunday. Then we visit each other and read and comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
Snippet Sunday group from facebook, not us, but many of our participants do both, is HERE
Snippet Sunday group from facebook, not us, but many of our participants do both, is HERE
This week's snippet is from a short story, 'Sporulators', more dystopian/scifi, than anything I've written to date It falls nowhere in a romance genre. Shocking, huh? ( <--Tongue-in-cheek-sort-of).
Since last week, I've changed the name of one of the two characters to avoid confusion. (As Veronica Scott pointed out, they both began with the same letter--thanks, Veronica!)
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
He'd hauled a lot of different types around this godforsaken part of the universe, but this guy, ‘Chief Agronomist’ Klars Stinson, was proving to be a truly special piece of work.
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
He'd hauled a lot of different types around this godforsaken part of the universe, but this guy, ‘Chief Agronomist’ Klars Stinson, was proving to be a truly special piece of work.
The snippet:
Eastwold spun his chair to face Stinson. “What do you think? With the far-rings settlements given up on three years ago, ships passing close enough to catch comm signals have been scarce. Still, don’t you think they’d have a loop transmitting? I don’t think anyone’s home."
Klars furrowed his brow. “Minimal communication has become the expected, and that causes little concern for the Department of Ethical and Sustainable Agriculture.”
Luke cut him off. “Minimal? That, I could understand, but according to my flight contract, communication has been nonexistent.”
That's it for this week. Thanks for visiting! I am truly grateful for comments, suggestions, and for you taking the time to read it.
I'd have thought some kind of communications, even if nothing more than a "we're still OK", would be expected. Luke is right to be worried.
ReplyDeleteHe is. Thanks for visiting, Ian! :-)
DeleteThe mystery and the tension builds!
ReplyDeleteGood words to read--thanks! :-)
DeleteSo what happens next? You have a way of keeping this reader in total suspense.
ReplyDeleteWe shall see. lol Thanks, dear friend!
DeleteYeah, absolutely no communication might be alarming.
ReplyDeleteYep. One of them is delusional, perhaps, and the other is rightly worried. :-)
DeleteI understand his worry. Maybe Klars knows something and is trying to hide it. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteYou are onto something, Jessica! Thanks. :-)
DeleteI'm really intrigued by this story and where it's going. I like the sense of dread developing in me as a reader, over what this total lack of communications means! Great snippet...well, re the names, as I said last week, my editor pointed that out to me because I overdid it - happy to be helpful.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jean!! I love that you get the sense of dread. And the advice you shared is some I have stored for future use as well... :-)
DeleteI liked Klars dry response. Made me chuckle and told me so much about him. And like the others, I'm very worried about what's going on on that planet.
ReplyDeleteThat's so good to read! Thanks. :-)
DeleteOkay. It means trouble. Or nobody's home. Bad news whatever.
ReplyDeleteIndeed. Either way, bad news. Thanks!
DeleteOooo I like what you're setting up here. More please!
ReplyDelete:-) <-- Big smile. Thanks, Amy!
DeleteIf there's been absolutely no communication in 3 years, something is wrong. Either everyone on the planet is gone (like beamed up to the mother ship) or simply dead. I think they're going looking for them. :) Great suspense building here!
ReplyDeleteYep. Yep. lol Thanks, Jenna! :-)
DeleteI'm curious to know what the lack of communications means. Intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen! :-)
DeleteNo communication of any sort? Doesn't sound good. I want to read more.
ReplyDeleteNot good at all. :-) Thanks, Diane!
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