Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors
Weekend Writing Warriors is where we share snips and bits of amazing tales by talented authors and writers. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished (we like it all) on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM each Sunday. Then we visit each other and read and comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
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This week's snippet is from a short story, 'Sporulators', more dystopian/scifi, than anything I've written to date It falls nowhere in a romance genre. Shocking, huh? ( <--Tongue-in-cheek-sort-of).
The snippet:
There could be a lot of reasons why planet Greenleyone was silent, and Captain Lukarhiah Eastwold suspected none of them were good. He tried to keep the impatience out of his voice when he said, “Lars, did you find out anything yet? Any communication noted by passing craft?”
The pudgy man looked away from his thinker screen, pushed his glasses up on his nose, then glanced Luke’s way. “Nothing yet, but I’m still searching the manifests and logs of the most recent ships that passed by. You know, Eastwold, it’s not uncommon for distant settlement worlds to go silent for extended lengths of time. They do have things to do other than chatting-up passing craft.”
“Because you know so much about the backwaters of space, right?” Luke said. He'd hauled a lot of different types around this godforsaken part of the universe, but this guy, ‘Chief Agronomist’ Lars Stinson, was proving to be a truly special piece of work.
That's it for this week. Thanks for visiting! I am truly grateful for comments, suggestions, and for you taking the time to read it.
I'm hooked! A mystery to solve and conflict of characters - my favorites. Well done, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Nancy! :-)
DeleteOh, I want to know what's going on with that planet, too! Looking forward to reading more!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jessica. Your words are music to my ears. :-)
DeleteVery interesting. I really love that last line.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Fallon. They have a pretty severe personality conflict. :-)
DeleteI enjoyed this, nice scifi beginning! I would say my editor once advised me not to let myself name more than one character in a book a name that started with the same letter (I was in a rut at the time of naming all my ancient Egyptian male characters something starting with a "K" and when they interacted it did get confusing.) Luke, Lars....who was the hero again LOL? Just a thought! The snippet really does entice me to keep reading because obviously there's lots of adventure ahead!
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for that tip! Makes perfect sense, Jean. :-)
DeleteThe idea of a planet that has "gone silent" is creepy and mysterious. Can't wait to find out why. PS I forgot to sign up but I do have a snippet up today. Man, I hate it when I do that!
ReplyDeleteI hoped readers would think that!
DeleteI got you on the list as soon as I saw this...sorry it wasn't sooner. :-)
An entire planet that has gone silent cannot be a good thing. And I agree with Luke that none of the reasons for that would be good. Can't wait for the mystery to unfold! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jenna! :-)
DeleteI suspect colony worlds might go silent from several bad causes.
ReplyDeleteHaving two things going on here -- the outer action with the silent planet and the conversation with the annoying Lars -- helps to make this scene interesting.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed. I didn't think about that, but will now have to try to put that to use more often. :-)
DeleteI wonder what's happening on that planet. Enjoyed the excerpt!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kate! Glad you enjoyed it. :-)
DeleteAn entire planet going silent can't be a good thing. Lars Stinson sounds rather unpleasant. Not like Luke who has been in deep space before.
ReplyDeleteIt can't be a good thing that a planet had gone silent. I'm intrigued to know more.
ReplyDeleteFirst thought when I read the planet went silent: Alderan after the Death Star eliminated it. Your snippet makes me want to read more.
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