Snippet Sunday group from facebook, not us, but many of our participants do both, is HERE
This week's snippet is from a short story, 'Sporulators', more dystopian/scifi, than anything I've written to date.
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
""The point I'm trying to make, Klars, is that DESA was depending on the loyalty of people given little consideration.".
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
""The point I'm trying to make, Klars, is that DESA was depending on the loyalty of people given little consideration.".
This is in Eastwold's POV. Could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa guidelines.
Eastwold is still speaking. The snippet:
Not given a choice to take a family, not given a choice to stay for ten or even twenty, and then return. DESA asked for a hell of a lot of commitment, but offered little in the way of compensation.”
Lars’ expression softened. “It will be fine; we used the New Day Method when planning for labor. Those men each took a vow of celibacy, so that made Greenleyone the life’s mate to each. They were content, and if it were otherwise, young volunteers would not have come forward to replace the aging workers.”
“Yeah. I’m sure. Volunteers, all. Who wouldn’t volunteer to come to a desert wasteland to live out their days?”
It does make you wonder why people would choose to volunteer. Nasty-sounding place.
ReplyDeleteThanks for visiting, Ed!
DeleteThanks for visiting, Teresa. I have changed the title of my post, and have lost the link to the WeWriWa. I don't know if anything can be done about this. I left a note for Diane. Oh, and thanks for your kind encouragement, keep writing 🌹
ReplyDeleteI think we have the linky fixed. :-) Thanks for visiting. :-)
DeleteOh my gosh, scary goings on and what the man has suggested is frightening. Teresa, you are a wonder creating your stories.
ReplyDeleteThank you, dear friend! :-)
DeleteEven if people did volunteer, things always change when they're actually in the situation. It's rare that things run smoothly all the time. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteOh my, that is so true! Thanks, Jessica! :-)
DeleteYeah, I'm wondering if 'volunteer' isn't the right word.
ReplyDeleteHaha... Perhaps not, huh? Thanks, Fallon! :-)
DeleteHmmm, I'm getting more and more skeptical of this whole setup. I think Lars is kidding himself...but it sure makes for an engrossing story! Great snippet...
ReplyDelete:-) <-- big smile. Thanks, Jean!
DeleteThey sound more like conscripts and I doubt they're happy if it's been longer than they expected.
ReplyDeleteYep. Conscripts is a good way to put it. :-) Thanks, Aurora!
DeleteOnly a very committed volunteer would do that! It doesn't sound like a mission most normal people would sign up for.
ReplyDeleteI agree. Thanks, Carrie-Anne! :-)
DeleteAnd if people are volunteering to go off to a distant, barren planet, they might have a lot of baggage their trying to run away from. Great setup!
ReplyDeleteExcellent point! Thanks, Alexis!
DeleteLove the world building and that snarky final line! :D
ReplyDelete:-) ! Thanks, Amy!
DeleteThat last sarcastic line says it all, doesn't it!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet!
Thanks, Lyn! :-)
DeleteThe sarcasm in the last line caught my attention, too. I have to wonder how bad a person's life might be that they'd "volunteer" to go there.
ReplyDeleteOr how brainwashed they are. ;-) Thanks, Diane!
DeleteThat final line is a zinger! Awesome snippet, my friend!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jules! :-)
DeleteDoesn't sound like a place I'd volunteer to live.
ReplyDeleteMe either. Strange, when I think that I'm the one who created it. lol
DeleteMakes me curious to why these people signed up to go. What are they running from? I'm intrigued to know more.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen! :-)
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ReplyDeleteThank you very much for your encouragement, Teresa. It is for 9 to 11 yr olds, but many grown ups read my books. My book about a Victorian child in the mines - Candle Dark - has a large following of retired miners 😊
It sounds so good. I'll check out Candle Dark, too. Sounds like something my granddaughter might like!
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