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This week's snippet is from a short story, 'Sporulators', more dystopian/scifi, than anything I've written to date.
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
"Klars smiled at him—a stiff, businesslike smile. “Incalculable? Really, Eastwold?”.
Last week's excerpt ended with this:
"Klars smiled at him—a stiff, businesslike smile. “Incalculable? Really, Eastwold?”.
This is in Eastwold's POV.
The snippet:
The best, we sent the very best. The best equipment, the best supplies, the best people. And those people were armed with microscopes and analytical labs set up on each square kilometer of ground. DESA didn't treat this like voodoo or magic. It was science that went to Greenleyone--science wielded by intelligent men."
Eastwold mumbled as he spun around to face Checkup 17's controls, "Intelligent men and a whole raft of underpaid laborers."
"What did you say, Eastwold? I didn't quite catch it?"
Luke turned to face him again. "The point I'm trying to make, Klars, is that DESA was depending on the loyalty of people given little consideration."
There is trouble afoot. Either they fight to the finish or hmm, I sense something awful is about to happen.
ReplyDeleteYep. Not having a good mission. :-) Thanks, my friend.
DeleteOne never knows what can happen in any given situation. The tension keeps building between these two regarding this situation. I wonder what it will take to get them on that planet. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteLoads of animosity. Stay tuned. Thanks for visiting, Jessica!
DeleteOoh, this certainly is racking up the tension. I wonder whose fuse will burn through first!
ReplyDeleteHa! The fuses are definitely lit! Thanks, Lyn!
DeleteThings can happen even with the most intelligent people. It doesn't make them infallible. Great snippet
ReplyDeleteTrue, so true. Thanks, Fallon!
DeleteLuke makes a valid point here. Minor nit - microscopes seem dated in this presumably far future setting. I enjoyed the snippet - this discussion between the two of them (both quite opinionated although I know which one I agtree with and it's not Klars LOL) is really fascinating.
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your thoughts, Jean! Thanks for your encouragement!
DeleteOoh, I love that final line! Really enjoyable exchange here. I can already sense so much about the world and the characters.
ReplyDeleteCool! Glad your picking up story vibes! Thanks, Julie!
DeleteSomethings never change. Spend gazillions on the tech and then undercut the humans in charge of it. Luke is clearly more of the realist here in being able to perceive that.
ReplyDeleteI second this comment because it's exactly my reaction.
Delete"plus ça change, plus c'est la même chose" Jean-Alphonse Karr
DeleteTis true. :-)
Thank you both!
Yes. It happens! Sometimes I feel like one of those unconsidered people.
ReplyDeleteOh, I hear you, Aurora. Age seems to make it worse though you'd think the reverse would;d be true. :-)
DeleteThanks for visiting. :-)
Workers given no pay and little consideration. I think there's a word for that! In any case, such people are likely to feel resentment and rebel.
ReplyDeleteI've long appreciated dystopian fiction. Unfortunately, it has a tendency to feel way too real and/or possible.
I'm loving the heated banter. I curious to know how it will all pan out.
ReplyDeleteLuke is very wise. Workers given no consideration aren't likely to be that loyal or give 100 percent.
ReplyDeleteTouche! An insightful revelation. I like him!
ReplyDeleteOuch! Something to consider. I can feel the tension rising between these two. Good job.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely tension there. :-) Thanks, Diane!
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