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This snippet if from Emmily, Unbound, a contemporary romance with sci-fi elements. It's in First-person.
There could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa
guidelines.
Emmily, the main character has lost pretty much everything in the last
twelve months. She and her dog, Murphy, are moving to an old hunting
camp her dad and mom willed to her. They've just arrived.
This is chapter one. Last week's snippet ended with this: I sigh... Well, the hunting camp isn't quite as rough-looking as the sign at the
end of the lane, but it's going to need some work.
We continue from there.
The snippet:
Maybe
I should have gotten a motel room back on Route 6, but it's pretty late for that now.
Something
scurries from the front porch when I step out of the car. I jump back inside, slamming the door shut twice as
fast as I opened it. What was I thinking, coming up here all alone—and it’s
almost dark? I must be nuts. I shudder, unsure if it’s the chilly air, or fear
causing it. Murphy's sitting up, looking around at the dusky world outside of
the windows.
Sleeping
in the car seems like a good option.
No. I know I’m braver
than this, at least marginally braver than my knee-jerk reaction was a minute
ago.
I dunno about you guys, but I'd probably be doing a donut and heading back to Route 6.
That's
it for this week. Thanks for visiting! I am truly grateful for comments, suggestions, and for you taking the time to read it.
Things that go scurry in the night can daunting when you aren't familiar with them.
ReplyDeleteAbsolutely true! She's definitely spooked right now. Thanks, Ed!
DeleteI would have stopped at Motel 6 to begin with. The woods and a dark cabin are nothing to play with in the dark. I think she needs to regroup and come back in the morning! Loving this story, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteShe might be making poor decisions, lately. ;-) Bad for her, but it makes for good stories. :-) Thanks, Jenna!
DeleteAs long as there's nothing scurrying inside, she should be okay. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteShe's good then. :-) Thanks, Jess!
DeleteI'd turn around and find that motel. Or sleep in the car. Things always look better in the morning.
ReplyDeleteThat is amazing, huh? How much better things look in the morning. :-) Thanks, Diane!
DeleteShe seems not to have thought this through too well...but I'd probably get out of the car and go inside, rather than sleep in the car! Interesting twists and turns this story takes. Enjoyed the snippet!
ReplyDeleteYep. I think emotionally, she's not in a good place right now, and it might be affecting her decision-making skills. :-) Thanks, Jean!
DeleteI hope she has a flashlight and some food!
ReplyDeleteHaha! You and she think alike! Coming up in the next page or so. :-) Thanks, Aurora!
DeleteShe's in a very scary situation I can understand her hesitation. I love the flow of your writing and the 'voice'! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you Lyn. You encouraging words are making me brave. :-)
DeleteI'd be turning around with you, Teresa. :) Enjoyed the snippet.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen! It's fun living vicariously through characters. The things I'd never do... :-)
DeleteMotel. Definitely! Things HOPEFULLY will look better in the morning. But why do I think she won't listen to me?
ReplyDeleteShe might not be thinking right. Just wait another day! lol Thanks for visiting, Nancy!
DeleteRenting a motel room and returning in the light of day definitely sounds like a good idea about now.
ReplyDeleteOh, if Emmily would only listen to all of our suggestions. lol Thanks, Aldrea!
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