Weekend Writing Warriors January 10, 2016

Hello all.  Welcome back to another week of sharing your writing with other writers. 
          Weekend Writing Warriors is a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, on their own blog to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE

  I'm excerpting from  my 2014 Nano WIP, Scifi/Dystopian. Working title: Dai Klavven. Last week I shared the opening lines. The last line was:  

"She was it--the last defense before the bunker sheltering a dozen children and the two old women caring for them was attacked."

     She lay motionless, watching them advance through  piles of collapsed  yesterday, crumbled yesteryear. Seemingly fearless and walking tall, they suddenly halted, then raised their arms in what looked like a salute to an approaching alien. It was clad in armor so blue it looked black.

     Her heart pounded and her mind raced. Could she be that lucky--had they just given away rank?  A startling and sickening discovery followed; seven-foot-something of blue-black evil spoke in stilted Earth English. How long had they been watching us before the invasion?

     Another slicing sound, and the alien weapon tore through the air above her.

     Blue-black shouted, “Stop weapons. We need live ones.”

That's it. Thank you for reading it. I learn from your feedback--and I'm so grateful for any insight you share.

Have a great week.

Weekend Writing Warriors January 3, 2016

Hello all.  Happy 2016! I hope you have your writing goals set, and that you'll continue to make #8sunday one of them. 
          Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors, a weekly bloghop.  Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com, then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished, to go live between noon, Saturday, and 9:00 AM Sunday EST. Then we visit each other and read, comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good. 
              Snippet Sunday group from facebook--not us, but many of our participants do both, can be found HERE

This week, I'm excerpting from  my 2014 Nano WIP, Scifi/Dystopian. Working title: Dai Klavven 

I'll go ahead and share the opening lines:

A noise, like a giant piece of paper tearing, sliced through the air. It was the only warning of their helix weapon discharge. Blue light corkscrewed above Lily.  A split second later, the old sandstone foundation behind her exploded. Bits of rubble pelted her in her forward position, but the collapsing stone wall in the rear buried the few remaining fighters in her group.   

She blinked, grasping for bearings. Around her, the lack of sound matched the lack of movement. No cries, no moans, just dust mingling with smoke in the hot breeze. More humans forever silenced. She was it--the last defense before the bunker sheltering a dozen children and the two old women caring for them was attacked.

  

That's it. Thank you for reading it. I learn from your feedback--and I'm so grateful for any insight you share.

Have a great week.