We have much cooler weather now, in the northeastern USA. A nice crisp change for the first day of autumn.
For anyone who doesn't know, Six Sentence Sunday is a bloghop--and one of the friendliest. Participants post six sentences of their writing, then the fun begins. Readers hop from blog to blog, sharing opinions, critiques and encouragement. We know what a solitary pursuit writing is--and Six Sentence Sunday is a great way to meet other writers, and take a break from our solitude. Complete rules and a sign up form are at the site here.
Returning to my WIP, ATNS, Marissa has been running for her life. The scene began with her playing hide and seek with her toddler. Then, something strange happened--a blinding light and a disorienting sound. She's not at the State Park anymore, and her son is not with her. Her situation has taken a turn toward the terrifying. She's just witnessed a large, raging beast bite a person in half. After fleeing, she found a dark doorway in which she's stepped through. This is what happens next:
"An eeriness permeated Marissa’s whole being. Listening…stilling her own gasps for breath, she heard ragged breathing. Searching the dim area for the source of the sound, her eyes trained on something sitting propped against the wall. Unsure of who or what she saw, she stepped closer, her eyes straining to focus in the near darkness. There it was... no…it was a he…there was a man. His hand pressed against his chest where blood oozed between fingers, and gold eyes searched her, conveying something between caution and pleading."
Well, there it is. She's either met her insanity...or her destiny.
Thanks for visiting and reading. Have a good week, all.
Uh-oh! I wonder what happened to him. Nice six!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jessica! We'll soon know :-)
DeleteFantastic descriptions! Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ceri! :-)
DeleteGood and creepy! Poor Marissa must be shaking in her shoes. Getting tiny bits of this scene is nerve-wracking. Can't wait to see what else happens :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Owly! Good observation--six sentence snippets puts a different focus on the words. :-)
DeleteGreat sense of her confusion and fear in this. Curious to find out what is going on!
ReplyDeleteThanks,. Eleri! I am so glad to read that you're curious. :-)
DeleteHe sounds - intriguing. Great six!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen! :-)
DeleteThe plot is definitely thickening! Very visceral six, Teresa.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kate!
DeleteWow, great six - scary too!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Paula! :-)
DeleteOkay...why do I keep hearing this in my mind, "Step into my parlor, said the spider to the fly..."
ReplyDeletePersonally, I think she's met her destiny but...hey, there's a big adventure either way. Another scary snippet this week!
Haha! I love your comments, Silver! Thanks for reading it and weighing in :-)
DeleteBut can he tell her what's going on?
ReplyDeleteThanks, Sue! :-) We'll soon get an idea about that :-)
DeleteI thought about what I liked most about this scene.. and the best I came up with is EVERYTHING. You did such an amazing job to introduce this character. It would be a fantastic,evocative moment in a movie - with the visual richness you provide through your writing, and the great arc and timing, it already is.
ReplyDeleteAwe, Dana! Your kind words are always so encouraging :-) ! Thank you, dearie :-)
DeleteLots of tension coming through here. Great 6, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kylie! :-)
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