Six sentence Sunday is a great, weekly bloghop. Talented participants post six sentences (or very close to that number) of a current writing project to share with their readers. Then the fun begins--visiting blogs on the list and commenting on other six sentence posts. It's a great way to meet other writers, get feedback, and help others by visiting their posts, lending ideas and support.
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Returning to my WIP, ATNS, something has just happened to Marissa. Following a disorienting noise and a blinding light, she's now unsure of where she is. She's awakened and just formed the thought that her toddler son--who had been with her before her surroundings changed, might be in danger. That thought was interrupted.
"A loud crash and screams brought her to her feet, running through what had to be some sort of a…a…metal building? God, what is this place! How the hell did I wind up here, and why? More screams and crashing thundered as she rounded a corner. Terror squeezed her chest. There was some sort of beast-- a very large beast, biting something in half. "
That's it for this week.
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Oh gosh. I want to see what this beast looks like. Nice six! :-)
ReplyDeleteHi Jessica! Thanks. It's always nice to see your comment :-) !
DeleteNow matter how you cut it, that's just not the kinda thing you wanna see. Time to run the other way, Marissa!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Monica :-) Yep, that is just what she does. :-) lol...
DeleteAn the tension keeps building! You're doing great things with this story Teresa, not only is it engaging, but the you've written it in a very smooth manner. Kudos!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jess! Neat to watch how our writing evolves. I see that in yours too. :-)
DeleteThat does not sound good! I'd be terrified, as Marissa is. The details really build up the mood here.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kate :-) Now to maintain when the immediate threat drops off ;-)
DeleteUh oh. What is the beast biting?
ReplyDeleteHi Elaine :-) Next week. But it is pretty terrible. Thanks for visiting :-)
Deleteooh, scary! I really like how you stay in her POV and voice for this. Want to know what exactly she sees around the corner: what does that beast look like, is he holding something or crouched over it on the floor? Kind of an early Halloween snippet :D
ReplyDeleteThanks, Marcia. You really have a knack for prompting thought with your questions. :-) Now my wheels are turning--and that's a good thing ;-)
DeleteACK! I hope the beast is NOT chomping down on her son! Better than her son is screaming and the beast is protecting him but...I'm a cock-eyed optimist! ;) Great six. Lots of action, tension, and what a hook!
ReplyDeleteWow--never gave that a thought about her son...but, I can't do that, lol... Unlike Stephen King, I can't trash children to sell a story. :-) I'm guessing that your books have quite imaginative plot twists, Silver! "cock-eyed optimist!" I love it. A thing toward which to aspire, me thinks. ;-) Thanks for visiting.
DeleteMy mind went with Silver's, too but I knew in my heart you probably wouldn't go there! This is pretty terrifying stuff...
ReplyDeleteOh, and thanks for liking my FB page! I appreciate that so much.
DeleteHa...Yep... I am just not tough enough, lol. Some things are sacred--I can't sacrifice to the god of entertainment :-) And children are on that list. :-)
DeleteYou are welcome for the like, Kate! Writers...I love how we stick together and toot each others horns.
Thanks for reading and commenting :-)
Yipes. Marissa's voice is very realistic, and you've created a whole boatload of tension here - well done.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen :-) I'm relieved that the readers are feeling the tension, fear...and the panic.
DeleteOMG! If I were her, my heart would be in my mouth right now!! Riveting scene, Teresa. Great six!
ReplyDeleteThanks, K.E.! "Riveting..." Neat :-)
DeleteBut, what if she "thought" she was awake but still dreaming?! This is crazy! What a wicked ride you're taking us on!
ReplyDeleteConfusion... Hi Carrie! The goal is to confuse the reader, just a bit--not enough to have them set the book down and forget about it. :-) But enough to intrigue and make them wonder. It is such a fine line, though. lol... Oy! The travails of writing. :-) Thanks for visiting. :-)
DeleteThat's really edgy - especially if one's toddler is out of sight. Very well written.
ReplyDeleteMust be a thousand thoughts flashing through her mind, Thanks for visiting, Elin. :-)
DeleteTeresa - wow! What a blood-curdling scenario-
ReplyDeleteI'm surprised that my mind went to that same dark place as Silver's...woooho sweats!! How come I always expect the worst? I'd rather be an optimistic reader! ;) This is excellent, the way you grab the reader and pull him right in! Terrific action!
Hey, Dana :-) As we say here in the states, "Waiting for the other shoe to drop." I'm not necessarily an optimistic reader, either. I wonder how that affects our writing??? Ha! There are always more questions than there are answers.
DeleteThanks for visiting, dearie. :-)
Bet that's where her mind is going.
ReplyDeleteHi Sue. :-) I can't say--then the tension would be gone ;-) Thanks for visiting :-)
DeleteFancy waking to all hell breaking loose. Great tension! Can't wait to see what this beast is.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Kylie! Yeah...all hell broke loose. :-)
DeleteNICE! I want to see more of that beast! (Safely. From very far away. ;D)
ReplyDeleteHaha! Yeppers...safely and far away, indeed! Thanks, Steven :-)
DeleteLove the tension!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Dana! I'm so relieved that the tension comes across to readers. :-)
DeleteHow are you, Teresa? I hope you're having a fine holiday weekend. I have been in a funk lately it seems. I'm running low on Sixes and I'm falling in with Dana ... I'm so gung ho for her notion of a think strike. lol.
ReplyDeleteWonderful Six you have here. The terror of it made my hair stand up. ;) I can't wait to learn more of your story. It's got me on the edge of my seat.
Thanks. ML. The weekend is quiet, children all elsewhere or working. Me, the Mr and the dogs. :-) Low on sixes? Ahhh... Write a few paragraphs and share six from them. We miss you. :-) And Dana might be on to something ;-) lol... I'm glad you stopped by. Visiting can lift the funk. :-)
DeleteHey guys, get your sombreros and join me on my beach!! I'm on the island of unthinking, you can't miss it, the one with the endless supply of coconuts.. we can keep this up forever!
DeleteToodle-oo :)
Oh my, Dana! It sounds inviting, I'll be right there. :-) I here Jimmy Buffet singing...somewhere off in the distance...something about a poptop and a broken flipflop. ;-) Hugs!
DeleteThe Island of Unthinking ... Dana cracks me up! And now I've got a song stuck in my head and "I'm wasting away in Margaritaville." ;)
DeleteSave me a lawn chair next to ya, I'll be there soon. ;)
Since I don't know much of your story, I'm intrigued by these six sentences. I almost scrolled back through your posts to find more about it. What a cliffhanger!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Karen... Yep, pulling from an action scene and cutting it into six sentence posts makes just about every week a cliffhanger. I find it useful for really examining small snippets, though. I'm glad you stopped by. I didn't forget about the award you gave me. Just trying to fit it all in. :-)
DeleteOh, crumbs! What is it? What's it eating...I don't think I can wait until next week!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ann! Six sentences are hardly enough ;-)
DeleteYou sure pack in a lot of tension in those 6 sentences! lol.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Tanya! Has autumn arrived there, yet? Will stop by and see what's up in your neck of the woods. :-)
ReplyDeleteNice six! Great tension building up to the last line. Now I want to know what the thing has in its teeth!
ReplyDeleteHi Denise, thank you for the encouraging words. In his teeth? It's not anything good... :-)
DeleteWow, Teresa! Wow! I have read it and rushed to the crib right away! :-D
ReplyDeleteExcellent idea! I 'll try joining you one Sunday. Do you need to register at sixsunday.com? Is there any poetry present? I do have some children's poetry to share.
Hey Daddy Drool, :-) Thanks for giving this a read. :-) lol...I can't bring myself to trash babies and children for the sake of a story. Nevah! :-) For six sentence Sunday, the rules are here: http://www.sixsunday.com/faqs/ I think as long as your work fits within those guidelines, it should be fine. It is a nice group of people who participate. I haven't seen poetry, mostly fiction. If you are unsure, there is contact information at the sixsunday.com--and you can ask one of the admins. Hope to see you one of these Sundays! :-)
DeleteMany thanks! I'll check it out!
DeleteThis is a great idea! I'll be checking the list..
ReplyDeleteCool. Thanks for visiting, Duncan. :-)
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