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This
week's snippet is from my scifi WIP, Dhor'en Sands. Lily, (Abducted
from Earth) the MC, is gathered with a group of rebels around a fire and
they're telling tales--their respective histories, mostly. She's just
been musing about how different Theusand is here among these people.
Last week ended with: She pictured her girls, and Ben,
then managed to whisper, “Ben was my
husband, my soulmate.”
We pick up from there. Note* Creative punctuation used at times to stay within 8 to 10 sentences max.
She looked up at the roof of the cave, but
she didn’t see limestone. Instead, she saw blue, Pennsylvania skies, and beneath
them, the gently rolling Allegheny mountains. Random memories lit up her mind’s eye; the
rivers, the forests, frost-edged scarlet leaves on an October morning, and wild
geraniums dancing in a spring breeze.
“You should see Earth. It is a
beautiful world.”
At least it had been beautiful, and never so much as now, though, living in her memories. She held her breath, her lips quivering while she struggled to keep her composure.
At least it had been beautiful, and never so much as now, though, living in her memories. She held her breath, her lips quivering while she struggled to keep her composure.
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Dear Teresa, Your words this week are special. I've been hoping this would happen and here it is.
ReplyDeleteSomething isn't working this week. I can't get anything going to make Granddaughter working. HELP!!!!!!!!!!!
Nice snippet(though Pennsylvania skies don't look too blue this morning. ;))
ReplyDeleteI think she needs this to help her heal. She's had so much going on since she was abducted, she never really had much time to reflect back on what happened. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteBeautiful memories indeed. Sad and lovely at the same time!
ReplyDeleteI can feel that this is going to painful for her to talk about.
ReplyDeleteYou can definitely feel the emotion in this scene. Great job! :D
ReplyDeleteA lovely and heartbreaking scene.
ReplyDeleteHer longing comes through in such a touching way. To know you can never go home--because you have no home to go back to, no loved ones there.
ReplyDeleteYou've done a superb job of letting us feel her anguish through her memories--of places we all take for granted because they are here, all around us. I can't imagine her pain knowing it's all gone. Such a touching snippet.
ReplyDeleteSuch powerful emotions memories can have. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteA beautifully written snippet. I have a WIP (nowhere near ready for sharing, probably will never see the light of day) where the female protagonist is a technician aboard a ship which left Earth thousands of years ago and the male protagonist is the spirit of a man born many years before her. He shows her visions of a world she has never seen and tries to make her understand. Your work reminded me of that story.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful , Visions, spiritual. Your writing is amazing.. . I want to read this whole book.. Where can I get it ?
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