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Saturday, May 30, 2020

WeWriWa: EU30

   
Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors. I'm reposting the bit about the relaxed rules in case I've missed anyone:
     In short, the WeWriWa rules have been relaxed. The goal is to maintain ease of finding the weekly snippet, but allowing more promo for published books.  You can check them out here: http://wewriwa.blogspot.com/p/the-rules-of-wewriwa.html
      We love our core group, the close-knit community that has evolved here at WeWriWa, the ease and joy of our weekly 'gathering,' but we also recognize that the time authors spend sharing and commenting has to make marketing sense, too. Time is precious.  It would also eliminate the need for the "wonky punctuation to stay within guidelines" disclaimer.   

      If you'd like to participate or read tempting morsels from other authors, please sign up--or check the linky list at: http://wewriwa.blogspot.com/
Also, check out the Snippet Sunday group on facebook. 
     This snippet is from Emmily, Unbound, an SFR story.  To read a compilation of all snippets posted for this story, click Here: Emmily Unbound, Chapter 1  Emmily, the main character, has lost pretty much everything in the last twelve months: her marriage, her parents, her job, and her house. She and her dog, Murphy, are moving to the mountains of Pennsylvania, into an old, remote, hunting camp her parents willed to her. It's her first full day here, and she's in the tiny local town getting supplies. She drew the (unwanted) attention of a sort of creepy local. He might have been following her. She thinks she lost him. Last week was a cliffhanger. Not sure that this week isn't another one. :-) Last week ended with:
As I near my lane, I’m watching my rearview mirror. I glance forward and… “Shit!” I slam on the brakes.
        Now, the  snippet:
         A man is standing smack-dab in the middle of the road. I start to drive to the side, kind of in the ditch, trying to squeeze past him. He shakes his head, raises a weapon he’s gripping with both hands,, and aims it directly at me.
     I slam the car into reverse. What the hell is this? A carjacking? In the middle of nowhere? I turn to look behind me and catch motion among the trees. More men are running toward the car. They level weapons at me too.
     That's the snippet. I feel like I need to give you a few more since you've waited so patiently for this pivotal scene...
    
     My chest feels tight; I might be having a heart attack.
     I put my foot on the brake and try desperately to come up with a way to get out of this. 
     The wind is blowing my trail dust past the car, and the man in front of me covers his mouth and nose with his sleeve. He’s walking closer, finally standing at my car door. The three of them now have me surrounded. Two no longer point weapons at me, but the guy at my window keeps his drawn. He leans down close to the glass and I don’t have to see through those dark glasses to know he's locked eyes with me. He speaks in halting words. “We… need your… help.”
Uh oh... What kind of help? Or maybe I should say this is the first day of the rest of her life. ;-)
That's it for this week.  Thanks so much or reading--and if you left a comment, I'll add a virtual hug. 

23 comments:

  1. Wow! That is one heck of a way to ask for help!

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    1. Yep. Pretty demanding, huh? Or they're not taking chances. :-) Thanks for visiting, Ian. :-)

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  2. Teresa, please remove my name from this week’s list. My computer is down. Thanks.

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    1. Done. I hope your computer problems are short-lived. :-)

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  3. That wasn't what I was expecting at all, but now I'm even more worried for her. Curious to know who they are and what kind of help they want.

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    1. She'll send some time trying to figure out who they are--and some time in denial when her gut is telling her exactly who they are. ;-) Thanks for visiting, Jess. :-)

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    2. Charmaine Gordon May 30, 2020
      I'm overwhelmed with what's happening here with the men needing help and she's worried big time with all these men. HELP!

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  4. He's got a strange way of asking for help!
    I suspect they're aliens since that's what I'd have in my stories.

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  5. I usually don't like first person present, but this was a great snippet and left me wanting to know who the men with weapons were and the "I". My visit to your snippets.

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  6. Perfect - you set us up that she was in danger then you shifted right - awesome.
    Tweeted.

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  7. Thank you for giving us a few more lines or I might have been having a heart attack too! His words give me hope that they're not just baddies lurking in the woods.

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  8. Nice way to ask for help! Although that was unexpected, given the way they surrounded her...enjoyed the excerpt and yeah, I imagine her life is changing for sure.

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  9. Not sure I'd really want to help someone holding a gun on me. Of course, I'd probably be too scared not to. Yikes

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  10. Wow, wasn't expecting ANY of this! Great Snippet! My heart was pounding through the whole scene.

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  11. Oh, yes. This is where it takes off! Great suspense leading up to this and even more at this moment. (And yes, this does qualify as a cliffhanger!) Fabulous snippet!

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  12. Girl, you sure do know how to hook a reader! This has been a wild ride so far. Can't wait for more!

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  13. Pulling out a weapon sure is an effective way of getting a passerby to help. I'm not sure, though, how well it will make her *want* to help.

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    1. That should've been "an effective way of getting a passerby to STOP," not help.

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  14. Oh my! What a seemingly hopeless situation!!

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  15. That is not what I thought he'd say. Great snippet.

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  16. Whew! That was heart-pounding. Now I want to know what they need help with!

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