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This week's snippet from *name change alert* Dhor'en Sands (it might still change again): Lily is following Theusand. They've just gone down a set of steps. It's the first time (in weeks) she's leaving the floor she's been on since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. The last line last week was. “ Memories of Ben and the girls jumped to the forefront, reminding her that her precious little family had always been, and still were her true destiny. "
This week's snippet from *name change alert* Dhor'en Sands (it might still change again): Lily is following Theusand. They've just gone down a set of steps. It's the first time (in weeks) she's leaving the floor she's been on since Lord Sand rescued her from the slave fight ring in the belly of the ship. The last line last week was. “ Memories of Ben and the girls jumped to the forefront, reminding her that her precious little family had always been, and still were her true destiny. "
Here we go...
She stifled her thoughts; Theusand was
about as weird and unpredictable as she’d seen him. It wasn’t the time to
push that button—the one where she had a life and a family before she knew him.
She exhaled when he appeared to ignore
her thoughts of home and changed the subject.
“I want you to see the ship and the good
people who crew it. They are curious about you.”
“Why do they even know about me?”
She felt him smile. "In any group, any culture, there is always talk about others, especially those who seem secretive or mysterious. What your kind refer to as gossip. I have lived with it all of my life because I am a Dhor'en Sand."
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This guy just gets weirder and weirder!
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued by Theusand and his purpose. I'm really liking this story.
ReplyDeleteHe's so intriguing. I wonder If the other people on the ship will be friendly. Can't wait for more!
ReplyDeleteInteresting...I love the twists in this story. I'm very curious to see where this segment leads.
ReplyDeleteI think I'm as curious as Lily about what Theusand has planned. Great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteHaha he IS an oddity, that's for sure!
ReplyDeleteI'm wondering what he has planned. I also wonder if the people of the ship will be kind to her.
ReplyDeleteLooks like we're all wondering where this is going. Good job to keep us guessing.
ReplyDeleteHmm, I don't know if finding out the others on the ship are gossiping about her is a good or bad thing, giving their penchant for fights to the death and all. Intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteHe is certainly mysterious or is he just weird?
ReplyDeleteAh, an interesting observation that will lead . . . I can't wait to find out!
ReplyDeleteyes, gossip, we do seem to enjoy it. Wonder how the rest of the crew will receive her.
ReplyDeleteI liked that he ignored her thoughts of home. It made me wonder whether he doesn't care or is being polite or perhaps even has some sort of filters in place and thus didn't even notice
ReplyDeleteLots of unanswered questions. Looking forward to learning more.
ReplyDeleteIt sounds like she's about to enter another strange situation!
ReplyDeleteInteresting peek into the culture aboard the ship. Leaves me wanting to know more, which is great. Excellent excerpt!
ReplyDeleteSo, he knows her thoughts, and she feels his emotions.
ReplyDeleteShe's not the only one who's mysterious. Such interesting characters. Very nicely written, Teresa! :)
ReplyDeleteI love these snippets every week! I'm so concerned with Lily and want to see her get back home. Somehow being shown off to the crew sounds like a bad thing to have happen, although I hope I'm wrong. Keep the snippets coming, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteI'm just catching up on this and thoroughly intrigued. Can't wait for the next snippet!
ReplyDeleteI imagine gossip is fairly universal. Intriguing snippet.
ReplyDeleteIt's so true about gossip. That's a universal thing, no matter what kind of world or culture.
ReplyDeleteI like her trying to squash thoughts of home to keep them from him, but I would almost rather we get a peek at the same time he does...
ReplyDeletePeople are social creatures, and gossip is the glue that holds us together.
ReplyDeleteI bet trying not to think about something is impossible, though!
Ah, gossip... Just can't escape it.
ReplyDeleteHer feeling his smile intrigues me.