Welcome to Weekend Writing Warriors where we share snips and bits of amazing tales by talented authors and writers. Each week, participants sign up HERE at wewriwa.com then post 8 to 10 sentences of their work, published or unpublished (we like it all) on their own blog to go live by 9:00 AM each Sunday. Then we visit each other and read and comment, critique, encourage--all those things that do a solitary writer's heart good.
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This week's snippet is from my scifi WIP, Dhor'en Sands. Lily, (Abducted from Earth) the MC, is gathered with a group of rebels around a fire and they're telling tales--their respective histories, mostly.
Last week ended with: On it went, one after another, sharing their histories filtered through the memories of so many.
We pick up from there. Note* Creative punctuation used at times to stay within 8 to 10 sentences max.
Lily listened, sucked into the tales of
hardship, of these people fleeing slavers and oppression. The stories of disease and starvation while on
the run were heartbreaking. Interspersed among the grave recollections of
facing unbeatable odds, there were stories of triumph in the face of
certain loss.
Drawn
into their ongoing struggle for escape, most of all she marveled at the
goodness and hope they somehow still carried.
As different people shared, she sensed it
was about more than simply running and hiding from the monsters trying to own
them. There was something else going on. There was an organized resistance at
work here.
Through all the tales, Theusand’s emotions
trickled through to her. He was different among these people. He was a better man here,
but which man was really him? Elder Spense
jerked her out of her thoughts when he carried a flask her way.
That's it for this week. I'm truly grateful for any comment or critique you share. Thanks for visiting!
It will be interesting to see what resistance they are capable of, surely something more than simple hiding and survival?
ReplyDeleteI think a common cause can unite many people. This is a great snippet! I'm always anxious to read more of this story!
ReplyDeleteYou have captured my attention from the beginning of this story. This snippet shows her gradually changing her opinion of Theusand and his people. Rising up against a common enemy will unite them. I hope that happens.
ReplyDeleteIntriguing hints and I liked the trickle from/about Theusand.
ReplyDeleteCharmaine GordonYou have continued with this remarkable story and I so enjoy the tale week after week. More, my friend. I look forward to the next part.
ReplyDeleteThe story moves on as this reader enjoys a special time.
ReplyDeleteI just jumped in and already this tells me so much. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteTheusand remains a mystery. What is he doing there? Why did he bring Lily there? All great story questions that keep me in suspense.
ReplyDeleteDefinitely intrigued to see what's coming next.
ReplyDeleteI wan to know what kind of man Theusand is too.
ReplyDeleteI like that Theusand is a different man amongst these rebels. Is he deliberately hiding something, or is t his the real him?
ReplyDeleteI like the thread of hope that runs through this passage, and I too want to know exactly what kind of man Theusand is.
ReplyDeleteNice reveals of past and future hopes. I wonder what she'll share with them.
ReplyDeleteTheusand is definitely an enigma of sorts, but I'm loving that there's a strong vein of resistance in these people.
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