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This snippet if from Emmily, Unbound, a contemporary romance with scifi elements. It's in First-person.
There could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa
guidelines.
Emmily, the main character has lost pretty much everything in the last
twelve months. She and her dog, Murphy, are moving to an old
hunting camp her dad and mom willed to her. She's listening to the
radio--for
distraction, and the Deejays have just gone on and on about a possible
UFO
sighting.
This is chapter one, after a scene break.
The snippet:
It’s
been hours and hours since we started out. Hilltops lift higher, now true
Appalachian Mountains. Surprisingly, my mood is lifting along with them.
I
fiddle with the radio and finally find a station. It’s fuzzy, but I do hear a
man talking about the phenomenon in the sky last night. He claims the regional
airport picked up something on radar, but then he back-pedals. “Officially, it was
a weather balloon.”
“The
weather balloon story again? But since I’ve never seen a UFO, I honestly have
no idea what they look like."
Yeah. That cut off mid-para. :-)
A weather balloon. uh huh. Sure. ;) Good snippet
ReplyDeleteEverything is a weather balloon, do weather balloon ever exist because I never saw one.
ReplyDeleteI'm just they look like UFO if you don't know what they are.
I agree with the others about weather balloons. Yeah, right. Love her attitude.
ReplyDeleteWeather balloons are amazing - I moderated a NASA discussion on one once (not that I'm am expert or even a tech person, I was just supposed to watch the time and recognize questioners to speak LOL). But yeah, EVERY UFO isn't a weather balloon, or swamp gas....in my opinion. Loved the excerpt!
ReplyDeleteYou'd think the men in black would come up with a better story than weather balloon! Lots of fun foreshadowing going on.
ReplyDeleteYour foreshadowing is working just dandy. At this point, it's pretty clear she'll have an encounter of the close kind with this whatever-it-is.
ReplyDeleteEd is right. The foreshadowing is really good.
ReplyDeleteI agree with everyone else about the foreshadowing - and I'm dying to know what that 'weather balloon' really is!
ReplyDeleteP.S. Forgot to register on the WeWriWar site this week. Mine's up at the usual https://hywelalyn.blogspot.com
ReplyDeleteA weather balloon is a convenient cover if the officials don't know what the heck it is--and they obviously don't. But I think Emmily is going to find out! Great story building here!
ReplyDeleteSuch a beautiful description of the scenery. I remember road trips, back before traffic became too awful for them to be fun. Finding radio stations along the way was part of the adventure.
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