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This snippet if from Emmily, Unbound, a contemporary romance with scifi elements. It's in First-person.
There could be wonky punctuation to keep within the #wewriwa
guidelines.
Emmily, the main character has lost pretty much everything in the last twelve months. She and her dog, Murphy, are moving to an old hunting camp her dad and mom willed to her. She's listening to the
radio for
distraction, and the Deejays have just gone on and on about a possible
UFO
sighting.
This is chapter one. Last week's snippet ended with this: “The
weather balloon story again? But since I’ve never seen a UFO, I honestly have
no idea what they look like."
The snippet:
They
could resemble weather balloons, I guess.” I wink at Murphy. “Or battlecruisers
from Star Wars, maybe even flying pink elephants.”
Murphy
answers me with another one of his perfected looks.
Bits
and pieces about government squashing talk of ETs and UFOs vanish into static
when I round the next bend—where the headwaters of the Allegheny river have
sliced a narrow pass through bare-branched hills.
The
cellphone navigation tells me I have a turn a half-mile ahead. I know this; I
mean I knew it was coming up…somewhere…soon. In my defense, years have gone by
since I visited up here at the family cabin.
To say that Jason never liked it is a big understatement...and it’s one
that leaves me bitter.
I like the little hint of background about the ex at the end, and the banter with the dog earns her a place in my heart.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Alexis! Murph is her little buddy. :-)
DeleteI agree about the hint of bitterness. She must have loved the place.
ReplyDeleteShe did, Aurora. She got caught up in a marriage that grew less and less happy, but the changes were incremental. And like so many people, she simply adjusted along with the changes, constantly creating a new normal. Thanks for visiting!
DeleteI hope the cabin will be all that she remembers! I definitely get the feeling for the place from your descriptions of the river, etc. Well done snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jean! She has plenty of memory-lane strolls at the cabin. :-)
DeleteI don't blame her for being bitter about it.
ReplyDeleteYou have a lot going on in this snippet -- her thoughts about UFOs, radio facts about UFOs, her feeling about Jason and the cabin.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Ed - so many bits of information being revealed seamlessly - and I know that look from a dog, my dog gives me one all the time! :) Lovely snippet - and I went on a boat trip on the Allegheni when I visited the U.S. several years ago. such a beautiful river!
ReplyDeleteLove the hint of a backstory, and her take on what the UFO should look like. Great snippet.
ReplyDeleteYour main character is beautifully crafted. All the little pieces of her and her life are revealed bit by bit, just as they should be. Great story, Teresa!
ReplyDeleteOh, ho! Jason. Now we know (or can guess) why she's running to the cabin. You are dribbling out info like a leaky hose. lol Better than inundating us with a gush of backstory. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteWe learn a lot in this excerpt, and it's revealed just perfectly.
ReplyDeleteYeah, I'd be bitter about it, too.
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