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Saturday, April 14, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday for 4-15-12


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This week's six is from the first book I wrote. It has a year's worth of editing still waiting in its pages.  But the story is engaging.

Gracie has been abducted from earth. Ultimately, as a life-saving measure on his part, she has ended up with an alien man who is slated to become King of a vast empire beyond our night sky.  There are differences--can't you just imagine how many differences there would be between us and those from another planet?  Just using the vast differences between the many cultures and races right here on a single world--the math is staggering.

So, we take a look at life in general to discern the things that would undoubtedly need to be addressed to build a compromise.

Sex...  Yep.  The differences in the way distinct Earth cultures view sex leads me to believe that chances are good that expected behavior by one group would differ from that of other groups.  Faith, religions, evolutionary psychology, among other things are all major influences.

In this snippet, Gracie (of Earth) has confided in her alien (Rialtan) friend and guard, Jia,  about sex.  And Jia has been commanded by her young King to divulge the information to him and his friend, the healer Ben.

 “I believe that things are different on her world, on earth.   I probably should not have done it, but I tormented her just a bit, and then she told me the story of the cow and the milk.”   Jia repeated the earth fable she had been told.

“Jia, please explain to Ben and me, the motivation for this milk and cow trying and buying?”
 
Jia felt put on the spot while trying her best to remember word for word what had been said,  “The cow would have a broken heart.”

Ben hesitated for a minute, and finally said, “There is something missing--she must have said more.”

 I admit, I was very unsure...putting this into a story because the stigma of the "Why buy the cow when you can get the milk for free?" seems to have very much passed in my part of the world.  But then thought better of it.  It still very much exists in some parts of the world...and it is likely a generational thing, as well.

I will add this, since this snippet leaves the six readers hanging, after several paragraphs going back and forth while Jia tries to recall all of the words Gracie shared with her, Ben, rather incredulous, states, 

“Does she not understand that a Rialtan man would never purchase a cow without first trying the milk?”

Okay, that's  my 'seven' sunday for this week.

28 comments:

  1. I liked it. The cow/milk concept's is still mentioned in the very conservative area where I live.

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    1. Hi Jess...thank you for visiting and weighing in. I wonder if there will ever be a time when we don't at least think about it. Human nature and the different acceptance levels based on gender... :-)

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  2. An intriguing six! I look forward to reading more. :)

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    1. Thank you, Jessica! :-) I don't know when I will get to this book' it was written 7 years ago...I have learned so much since then. Oh my...the editing work to be done!

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  3. But the good news is, apparently they do have cows there. It's something the worlds have in common. I'm finding Ben to be potentially hilarious. Great six!

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    1. Hi Kate. Hope you are feeling better! Well, that is the thing with SSS. They are brief snippets. Jia did have to explain what a cow was. :-) But the concept of good investment--or sampling for free, I think, carries across worlds ;-)

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    1. Thank you, Tonya. He was a fun character to write :-)

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  5. Ben's funny. I love stories like this.

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    1. Thanks, Elaine! He has a good sense of humor bettered only by his level head. :-)

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  6. I'll admit, when I read the snippet, I had no idea what you meant by the cow and milk story, but then when you said it I remembered reading about it recently. Don't listen to me though, it still works, especially because it will be in context with the rest of your story...

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    1. I love that you had not heard of it. That tells me that I have to put enough explanation into the book so that it isn't a misunderstood earth fable--for the earthlings reading the story. ;-) Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  7. Ben's response(s) at the end made me smile [both line 6 and line '7']. The cow / milk story is still one I hear... though I've never thought about the cow having a broken heart.

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    1. Hi Lorraine. Gracie tried to understand the whole concept of sex and commitment--her own values and morals running crossgrain those of her new world. It is a complex conversation she has with Jia--the night it was discussed. :-) Thanks for visiting! :-)

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  8. I really liked that snippet! Looking forward to more! :)

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    1. Thank you, Cat! More to come somewhere down the line. :-)

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  9. I think the cow/milk story works really well here. It let me know right away the vast difference between them. I really like that six/seven and I am definitely looking forward to more. Great job!

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    1. Thank you, Lea! Good feedback. I am learning so much from SSS. And I so enjoy reading the snippets of others. :-) Thanks for visiting :-)

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  10. Haha, the last (seventh) line made me laugh!

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    1. Hi Rachel, glad it gave you a laugh. It was written rather tongue-in-cheek. Thanks for visiting. :-)

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  11. This was fun, clever and so interesting, Teresa! Good story concept.

    In today's world, I believe that, alas, many poor cows go unpurchased, and milk flows with ever increasing freedom. ;-)

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    1. lololol! Thank you for the laugh! And I believe that is true. We do have the push for "free range cows" of late :-)

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  12. Interesting! I love sci fi and it's a pleasure to find this snippet. Hope you'll post on subsequent Sundays cuz I'll be back!

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    1. Hello, Owl Lady. Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! I am folowing you now so I can find my way back. Thanks for visiting and your kind words. :-) Have a great week.

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  13. I loved the last line!

    Happened to be visiting from A to Z and thought the name was familiar...you visited my blog a while back. Glad to have tracked you down at last :)

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    1. I remember your blog! I commented on a much earlier post in the A to Z. I loved your language post. Writing scifi is fun. I know what you mean about names becoming familiar and tracking people down. I have a good day's work ahead of me when this is over. I want to go through and check each comment I rec'd and then add to my blogroll--the blogs that really stood out. I think that yours does. Thank you for visiting and taking the time to comment!

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