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This snippet is from Emmily, Unbound, an SFR story. To read a compilation of all snippets posted for this story, click Here: Emmily Unbound, Chapters 1 & 2 Emmily, the main character, has lost pretty much everything in the last twelve months: her marriage, her parents, her job, and her house. She and her dog, Murphy, have moved to the mountains of Pennsylvania into an old, remote, hunting camp her parents willed to her. On her first day there, along a desolate road she's been forced at gunpoint to haul a wounded man to her house.
When we reach the four-lane highway outside of the county seat, he’s sitting rigid; his eyes search the surroundings.
“Kade? It’s okay. I really doubt anyone is going to threaten you.”
“Us.”
“Alright… us. No one is going to threaten us.” I check him over, then add, “By the way, we need to pick up some clothes for you guys. You look pretty bad. I should have given you a good look-over before we left; there’s blood on your shirt.”
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“That is a…problem?”
“Well, if you were wearing hunting clothes, no, but a uniform? It might stand out.”
“I do not know how to fix this.”
I pull into the shopping center and park next to the second time around shop. “Kade, maybe you should stay in the car. You’ll just have to trust me on this.”
“No. Even if I were willing—and I am not—Genrael would never depend on me to follow his orders again.”
It is what it is. The worst is that someone will be alarmed by his appearance and call the cops. Problem solved, at least for me.
That's the snippet.
Yikes! That could lead to a totally new problem though. I don't think local cops are prepared for aliens. 😉 Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteWow--your comments almost make me want to take this story in a different direction. lol Thanks for visiting, Jessica!
DeleteThat would definitely be an alarming sight in the store.
ReplyDeleteIt would. I don't know what I'd do. Prolly not make a scene, but I'd give them a wide berth. Thanks for visiting, Fallon!
DeleteA blood-stained shirt...not usually something one has to worry about when going on an excursion to town lol. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI know! lol Thanks, Jules!
DeleteI'm worried if I have a tiny stain on my clothes - but a blood stain!!!
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LOL! I know what you mean. No way. Just no way.
DeleteThanks for visiting, Daryl!
So sincere - he's obeying orders and she's resigned.
ReplyDeleteIt's strange - after missing a couple of months, I'm reading some of the same stories.
He is, and she is. :-) Yep. Same story. I think it needs more editing. It's really hard to decide when it's ready to let go. Thanks for visiting, Aurora! Good to see you back!
DeleteHmmm, yes, getting noticed like that might be to Emmily's advantage!
ReplyDeleteIt might, but she has a solution. :-) Thanks for visiting, Ian!
DeleteInteresting the way this is all evolving, with the need for clothing etc.Lots of problems for her to solve... Enjoyed the snippet!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Jean. I'm still editing--trying to choose which problems and solutions really have a place in the story. The more I know the less I know. Thanks for visiting!
DeleteIt is what it is. She sure has come a long way! I like the direction she's taking.
ReplyDeleteIt is. She can flip out over everything--and drive herself crazy, or do as her mom used to tell her--"Choose your battles." Thanks, Nancy! :-)
DeleteShe seems to be more comfortable with them now, not on the edge of panic anyway. I wonder what she'd say if the cops did show up?
ReplyDeleteShe does have an interaction with authorities coming up in a few weeks. Not today yet. I wonder what she will say. Might have a chance to get away then. ;-a) Thanks for visiting, Alexis!
DeleteSince she's seen the blood, she needs to come up with a cover story before she goes into the store. So much easier than winging it! Love this story!
ReplyDeleteAwe, thanks, Jenna! :-)
DeleteGetting supplies was already going to be complicated. Now you've complicated it still more -- which is what writers should do.
ReplyDeleteThanks, Ed! Coming from you--that means a lot!
DeleteYa, blood on a shirt in public is never a good idea. I would think getting caught would be more of a problem with Genrael than breaking orders and allowing her to go into a store unattended.
ReplyDeleteKind of scary that he appears to not realize it might be an issue, huh? :-) Thanks for visiting, Jeff!
DeleteShe seems more comfortable around them now. I guess she would since they haven't hurt her.
ReplyDeleteThey haven't, and she is. She's pretty much resigned to being in it with them for the long haul. Thanks for visiting, Elaine!
DeletePoor Emmily. Kade is not only clueless to human culture and society but doesn't care. I can only imagine how he plans to get them out of trouble in the store.
ReplyDeleteYep. The aliens really would rather remain undiscovered. It's General who is exercising an abundance of caution to protect his group. They are a military group, so the rest will follow orders. Thanks for visiting, ED!
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